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I liked your technique at the very end of alternating poignant statements with the mundane observations about an older person fumbling with an iPhone and complaining about it.

It's an effective way to slow things down so you don't hit the reader with those big thoughts in rapid succession.

I'm going to look for an opportunity to "steal" that!

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Steal it! And look at you reading as a writer!

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